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Friday, April 1, 2011

Epic Follower Blogfest Contest

Yikes! I have been working all week to write one sentence. I am so silly. After all this time though, I still believe dreams can come true.

So, when I came across a contest hosted by Shelley Watters http://shelleywatters.blogspot.com/ , I got excited! Shelley has a cool blog called, "Is It Hot In Here Or Is It This Book?" and she is holding the Epic Follower Blogfest Contest.

This is where that one sentence comes in. All of us hopefuls have the opportunity to pitch a manuscript in 140 characters. The twitter sized proposal has the potential to land its manuscript in the hands of one Suzie Townsend of Fine Print Literary Management! (If I had a choice to win this prize or backstage passes to a Bon Jovi concert, I wouldn't even have to think about it. Jon and the boys could go home to their wives. Yeah, it's that good.)

Anyway, please check out Shelley's blog. There are a lot of great entries! Good luck to all!

And feel free to let me know what you think of mine! I yearn to learn!

Thanks!

Here goes:

SANE ENOUGH TO KNOW SHE'S CRAZY
Women's Fiction

A train rumbles as Carrie battles the hallucinations that drew her to the tracks. There's just one truth left to trust: This war must end.
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20 comments:

  1. Lori M. LeeApril 1, 2011 at 12:16 PM

    Oooh, I love that. I'm hooked!

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  2. NickApril 1, 2011 at 1:45 PM

    Now I have to know ...what war? What voice? :) Nice.

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  3. douglas esperApril 1, 2011 at 2:51 PM

    i love that you brought us right up to speed with action and conflict. good work

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  4. J E FritzApril 1, 2011 at 3:13 PM

    Very action packed and exciting. I think the sentence is a little long. Shorter, more punctuated sentences tend to heighten the tension.

    It sounds interesting, but I think you should be more specific. I don't really understand why Carrie has to battle a voice. Is she schizophrenic? Psychic? Also, I'd like to know how she battles it--therapy? An exorcist?

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  5. Ruth DonnellyApril 1, 2011 at 3:57 PM

    Wow, exciting! Lots of tension here--maybe a bit more hint of what she's going to do. (I know, hard to do in 140 characters!) Good luck from another Ruth. :)

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  6. KaleenApril 1, 2011 at 4:00 PM

    I agree with JEFritz. What is the war with- the voice?
    Great action though. It does hook you in!

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  7. RuthyApril 1, 2011 at 4:19 PM

    Thanks, all! I appreciate the feedback. Duh to me- I was thinking it had to be only one sentence. So glad I got to break it up- plus I had to chop a few characters to make tweet status.

    This is fun.

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  8. UnknownApril 1, 2011 at 4:41 PM

    I like the tone and intrigue It did leave me questioning the war and the voice. A few more words and you'll have it. :)

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  9. Crystal CollierApril 1, 2011 at 6:07 PM

    Interesting. I would like a little more clarification as to what battle she's fighting, but really, a great pitch.

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  10. Eliza TiltonApril 1, 2011 at 7:45 PM

    I agree with Crystal. It's a great pitch. If you can squeeze in who the battle is against, that would be perfect.

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  11. erica m. chapmanApril 1, 2011 at 10:15 PM

    Hmm, I'm wondering about the train, is it a real train? I would clarify it a little more, but it sounds interesting ;o) And what is she warring against?

    Nice job!

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  12. Elizabeth BriggsApril 1, 2011 at 10:25 PM

    This is really interesting, although I'm not really sure how the train connects to the war. Is this historical? Or a mental battle? Otherwise, great job!

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  13. UnknownApril 1, 2011 at 11:35 PM

    The questions left unanswered have me wanting more. And I love your title! Good luck!

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  14. CobraMisfitApril 2, 2011 at 6:54 AM

    Nothing to add. This is an excellent Twit-Pitch. Best of luck!

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  15. Robin DelanyApril 2, 2011 at 8:22 AM

    Very interesting!

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  16. AnonymousApril 2, 2011 at 11:02 AM

    Well, after reviewing your comments, I think you have done the job. People are pondering and questioning the details of your story. I do agree that a little more detail is required to really reel them in.

    Assume your readers know nothing about the book. How will you make them want to pick it up? Is this going to do it??

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  17. Julie DainesApril 2, 2011 at 12:33 PM

    Sounds like a interesting story. Loose the train in your pitch and add something more immediately pertinent to the story. Love the premise!

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  18. Brenda DrakeApril 2, 2011 at 2:29 PM

    I'm intrigued. I'm guessing the war is with the hallucinations and that she's about to jump on the tracks. If that's what I'm supposed to think, then I say you've done your job and hooked me.

    Good luck!:D

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  19. brandileigh2003April 2, 2011 at 4:01 PM

    War doesn't make sense in this pitch to me.
    Brandi Kosiner

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  20. RuthyApril 2, 2011 at 7:41 PM

    Thanks for all the comments! I did some minor word changes and hope it makes the difference. I appreciate the help! Feedback rocks!!

    Good luck everyone

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